I am applying to Creative Writing because I have always liked writing short stories since I was a child. I continued to write many stories throughout junior high school and high school. Majoring in English Literature in university, I took many creative writing courses to further improve my writing skills. I am applying to the Master of Fine Arts in Creative Writing Program at ABC University because I believe your training can help me write better. My goal is to become a professional writer. The program is where I can challenge myself and hone my writing skills.
例子中的同學是申請Creative Writing，但是什麼科系都會出現這樣的寫法。申請Computer Science的就會說：
I am applying to Computer Science because I have always liked computers since I was a child. I competed in many contests throughout junior high school and high school. Majoring in Computer Science in university, I took many computer science courses to further improve my computer skills. I am applying to the Master of Science in Computer Science Program at ABC University because I believe your training can improve my technical skills. My goal is to become a software engineer. The program is where I can challenge myself and hone my skills.
In high school, I was ranked top of my class. I scored 100 in both Physics and Mathematics in the University Entrance Exam. In my sophomore year, I competed in a national physics competition with over 500 competitors and won first place. Eventually, I graduated from university with a GPA of 3.98/4.0. For the above reasons, I believe I will do well in your graduate school.
The crucial reason for me to apply for a PhD in XXX is my research experience in [research areas A, B, and C]. . . . [details on research experience in areas A, B, and C] . . . I would like to continue pursuing the research I did in my [master’s or university degree] and work on [research areas D and E].
When I graduated from university, I entered a law firm and gained three years of work experience. I later decided I wanted to work in the legal department of an NGO and support the development of the semiconductor industry with my legal expertise. I was in charge of drafting and reviewing contracts, settling legal disputes, and offering legal consultation. It was a new challenge since it was much different from my job at a law firm. Since all I knew was law theory, it was difficult to offer suitable advice when I did not have sufficient background knowledge of my clients’ business model and technology. I was not able to cover all the risks. Thus I always asked my colleagues and other experts and conducted research online. Moreover, I needed to have an understanding of governmental policies. Finally, I had to think about how to give easy to understand and useful advice. At first I did not do my job well but I am now a mentor who can give new staff members training. I now have the ability to consider issues from a wide number of perspectives. I feel confident about pursuing a career in this area. This is why I am applying to your program.
動機應該是：「我未來想做的工作是to provide technology law consultation」。
動機要承過去經驗，要啟未來計畫。過去的經驗都朝向to provide technology law consultation方向前進。這位同學也不是一開始就知道自己想要to provide technology law consultation，而是一個從law到technology law的過程。
大學唸法律 → law firm work experience → NGO law experience → NGO technology law experience → semiconductor company technology law experience → (future) to provide technology law consultation
現在申請這間學校是因為未來希望能夠 to provide technology law consultation。
I am applying to your program because I am pursuing a career in technology law consultation. I have a background in law, having studied law in university, and work experience in legal consultation and more specifically, technology law consultation. In terms of my academic qualifications, I graduated from university with a GPA of 3.84/4.0 and successfully passed the bar exam in 2010. As for legal consultation, I have three years’ work experience in a law firm, two years’ experience as a legal advisor in an NGO, and one year’s experience as a legal advisor in ABC, a semiconductor company. I first became interested in technology law when I was working in the NGO. I supported the development of the semiconductor sector with my legal expertise. I learned about my clients’ business models and gained basic knowledge of the semiconductor industry through doing my own research and learning from technology experts in the organization. With my legal expertise and basic understanding of the semiconductor industry, I was offered a job to work as a legal advisor in ABC. I decided I would pursue a career in technology law consultation since this is an area where Taiwanese companies fall behind their international counterparts. I need more training in X, Y, and Z. This is why I am applying to your program.
Dr Fiona Hu