作文題目：

Some people think that in order to solve traffic and transportation problems people should be encouraged to live in cities rather than in suburbs or in the countryside. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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這位學生英文程度蠻不錯的，所以我的feedback是用英文寫。

The question is: People should be encouraged to live in cities to solve traffic issues. Do you agree or disagree? I think what you are trying to say is: I partially agree with the statement.

Encouraging people to live in cities would solve traffic issues in the short term, but in the long run, traffic problems would actually worsen.

Rephrase your argument so your thesis is very clear. At the moment, you are saying ‘there are pros and cons to XXX,’ and it sounds a bit wishy washy.

Main Point One should be: If people are encouraged to live in cities, traffic problems can be alleviated in the short term. Your current topic sentence confuses ‘living downtown’ with ‘living in cities.’ Downtown means the city centre but ‘living in cities’ could mean anything that is within the city. If someone is living in a city, he could still be an hour away by metro from the city centre (downtown).

Also, we are not talking about the likelihood of whether people will use public transport. We are talking about ‘People should or should not be encouraged to live in cities to solve traffic issues.’

Main Point Two should be ‘Even though XXX can solve traffic issues in the short term, in the long run, it will actually worsen traffic issues.’

Or you could say: Even though XXX can solve traffic issues in the short term, in the long run, it will lead to overpopulation which will actually worsen traffic issues.’ Your topic sentence for Main Point Two is not clear.

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以下是我提供給學生的參考英文文章：

https://streetsolutionsuk.co.uk/blogs....
https://www.cermoni.app/post/the-rela...
https://www.orfonline.org/expert-spea...
https://www.ptua.org.au/myths/downs/
https://www.strongtowns.org/journal/2...
https://humantransit.org/2010/07/what...